托福写作：0827托福独立写作解析与

托福写作：0827托福独立写作解析与（共9篇）

托福写作：0827托福独立写作解析与 篇1

20170827托福独立写作题目：

It was about two centuries ago when Industrial Revolution made it possible to produce paper and print in large quantities at a much low cost that printing press started to develop rapidly and lead public opinions. Nowadays, there are more means for mass medias to convey information, like radio, TV and Internet. However, facing the overwhelming amount of information, people begin to challenge the credibility of mass medias. In my mind, the mass medias, in general, are actually more reliable than before.

To begin with, it is in fact the challenge and criticism of readers and audiences that force mass medias to try their best to present accurate information timely. Undoubted, the popularization of compulsory education and expansion of universities have overall increased the percentage of population that receives education. As a result, people today have stronger ability to judge and analyze than before. Also, as people gradually get used to collect information from different sources and make comparison, it is unwise for a media to fool people with inaccurate information at the risk of being discredited. On the contrary, most mass medias who aim at long term development of good public relationship invest in the recruitment of excellent journalists and improvement of facilities to serve readers. But, in the past, mass medias were less concerned about their accuracy as they doubted people’s ability to discern.

Secondly, the fierce competition also pushes people working in media industry to be accountable for their information. In the past, the right to publish and broadcast was controlled tightly by governments and a small number of media companies. They, as the true leaders of public opinions, cared less about their accuracy but focused more on how to make profits by manipulating minds. For example, during World War II, governments of many European countries, including Britain and Germany, strictly censored and controlled the press to encourage people to join the army and serve for the war while ignoring the facts of heavy death tolls and economic loss. But today, the broad coverage of Internet has lowered the threshold of media industry and enabled small companies and even individuals to compete for readers and audiences. Therefore, a media that fails to guarantee the authenticity of its information can hardly survive.

Admittedly, it is also true that there are problems caused by mass medias’ inaccurate information. To attract eyeballs and strive to be the first to release the information, some medias choose to distort the truth or publish without further research and confirmation. Their irresponsible behaviors not only mislead the public, but also disrupt the order. The worst scenario is to motivate other medias who fail to observe professional ethics to follow suit. This is especially obvious in the report of celebrities’ tidbits. However, for the healthy development of mass media in the long term, such irresponsible acts will be gradually corrected by general public’s ability to discern right and wrong as well as the unbreakable law of survival of the fittest.

To sum up, the mass media nowadays have to be more accountable for the authenticity of their information, in order to survive and succeed in the long run and to protect the whole industry.

如今的媒体报道的信息比之前更精准：

1)考虑到大众的分辨能力，只有报道真实信息的媒体能够发展

2)因为激烈的竞争，各媒体必须努力保证信息的可靠性

如今的媒体报道的信息不如之前准确：

1)为了吸引眼球，扭曲事实

2)为了尽快报道，缺乏进一步的核实

3)造成误导大众的后果

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement : Sometimes people think nowadays the media (TV, newspaper, Internet) are less concerned about the accuracy of news than in the past, and the incorrect information may cause more problems to the public.

本文作者：Cindy Pan(公众号：英文写作素材)

托福独立写作的误区剖析 篇2

误区一：考试遥遥无期，时间多多益善

在笔者所教的托福写作强化班里，当课程接近尾声时有许多考生的托福考试时间依然待定，他们的理由往往是自己基础不好，需要多一点时间来充分准备。然而，这种在时间上的自我宽容通常会将自己置于尴尬的境地：时光流逝，问题依旧，自信心却在减损。事实上，单词永远背不完，好句子永远储备不完，题目也永远练不完。考生必须明白一点：复习备考永远没有绝对的充分，只有相对的充分。所谓相对的充分，就是在考场上充分应用平时所掌握的素材，把平时训练的水平发挥到极致。因此，备考关键不在于准备时间有多长，而在于考生在备考过程中的专注、考试期限的明确以及备考计划的切实可行。通常而言，考生准备托福考试的时间不宜超过三个月。

误区二：每天计划复习写作N小时

有些考生为准备托福写作制定了严格的计划，比如计划每天复习一小时、两小时或三小时……但在制定这个计划的同时，考生很有可能也在计划着浪费其中三分之二甚至更多的时间。如果考生今天打算拿出两个小时来复习写作，那么在其潜意识里，至少有一个半小时是可以虚度的。因此笔者建议，考生在制定具体到每一天或者每一周的计划时不要做时间的计划，而要做任务的计划。将立场段、总结段写作，主体段论证思路搭建，论点中心句组织，论据分析层控制，论据案例层运用这些任务分摊到每一天或每一周，这样备考的效率就会提高很多。

误区三：凑了字数，丢了分数

很多考生都非常看重文章的字数，这本无可厚非，但是展现活跃的思维和高超的写作技巧靠的不是庞大的字数，而是精确与高效的表达。如果把凑字数作为写作的第一要务，那就得不偿失了。因为言多“语”失，单纯追求写作字数不仅会导致不必要的语法、拼写和表达错误，还会使文章论证效率低下，写作内容冗余。因此，考生在考前培养准确的写作“规模感”十分必要，即考生应该对文章字数有一个整体的概念，并大致把握在这个写作框架中每一个自然段的字数区间。以托福独立写作“总—分—总”结构下的五段式为例，考生可以这样分配每段的字数：立场段30～50字；论证段一（让步段，无例子） 50～70字；论证段二（主旨段，有例子） 100～150字；论证段三（主旨段，有例子） 100～150字；总结段20～30字。

误区四：立场段走悬疑路线

由于受到传承了几千年的中庸思想和流行了许多年的悬疑小说的影响，许多考生在托福独立写作的立场段走起了“朦胧+悬疑”路线。在托福独立写作的第一段，有些考生忙着烘托气氛、制造悬念，使自己立于两头都不得罪的“不败之地”，于是写出了下面这样的开头段：

Nowadays， X is getting more and more important. Different people have different opinions toward different things. Some people may say it is good while others believe that it is wrong. So whether I agree or disagree with this depends on a case by case basis. I would like to discuss my point of view in the following paragraphs.

这类被一些考生奉为经典的写作模式在阅卷考官看来却不知所云，原因有以下三个方面。

1北美考试的议论文写作考查的不是阐述真理的能力，而是针对一个具有明确倾向的观点自圆其说的能力。

2托福独立写作题目中的任务设定通常是“… agree or disagree …”，其中or一词清楚地说明了考生的写作目标，即要表达明确的肯定或否定态度。

3悬疑小说依靠悬念来吸引读者一章又一章地看下去，但是吸引托福独立写作的阅卷考官看完文章的不是悬念，而是明确、切题的立场和强大的论据支持。

在托福独立写作中，立场是文章主旨的浓缩，明确、切题的立场是高效论证的前提。因此，考生选择的立场应该是对题目任务的直接回应：如果题目任务是agree or disagree，考生就在立场段直接表明自己同意或者不同意的倾向；如果任务是which one is better，考生就在立场段明确写出自己的选择。

误区五：考场写作循序渐进

托福独立写作的限定答题时间为30分钟，这意味着考场写作与平时的写作训练大不相同。一些考生无法在规定的时间内写完文章，更多的考生虽然能够完成，但是无法充分发挥所学。由此可见，时间紧迫带来的压力很容易影响考生的临场发挥，而对段落的写作顺序进行灵活调整就能缓解这一问题。考生应充分利用托福机考写作界面可以随意添加信息的特点来优化写作流程。笔者建议考生按照下面的流程来写。

1立场段

2总结段

3搭建论证段中心句

4填充论证段论据

在写论证段之前先写总结段的好处是确保文章的完整性，因为文章形式上完整与否的关键不在字数，而在于“总—分—总”结构的呈现。在写完立场段和总结段之后，考生会有心态上的相对优势：文章框架已经基本完整，不必再担心写不完，因而可以放开手脚在论证段里尽情发挥。在论证段，建议考生也不要逐字逐句地写，而是可以先写出3～4个论点的中心句，然后将光标回调至每个中心句下面，填充论据来充实自己的论证。这种“框架+填充”的写作方式可以使考生避免因时间不够而导致的文章结构不完整，也可以有效帮助考生合理调配写作资源，避免论证重叠。

误区六：总结段里出现because

在托福独立写作的总结段，有些考生习惯这样写：“In summary， the claim presented in this topic is vulnerable to question or challenge because of the reasons that I have just mentioned above.”

这样写是不可取的。首先，在整个写作框架中，总结段的作用就是总结，使文章结构完整，仅此而已。在这个阶段，一切都变得简单——只需再次表明自己的观点就可以了。字数不宜多，时间投入更不该长，尤其不应该写“because ...”作解释，因为支持和解释立场的任务应该由论证段来完成。如果在文章的末段出现because，就是在提醒考官：论证段论证不力，在总结段亡羊补牢。况且，“… because of the reasons that I have just mentioned above”这样的表达是没有实质意义的。考生不如腾出时间和空间，在文章末尾提出一条建设性意见，如：“In summary， the claim presented in this topic is vulnerable to question or challenge. Therefore， it is essential for us to …”

误区七：形散神也散，一切随机缘

散文文体的特点是形散而神不散，这是境界。而托福独立写作是议论文，议论文体更注重文章结构，有些考生却写得形散神也散，这就会让阅卷考官崩溃了。对于很多考生来说，文章结构的搭建基本是随机的，想到哪儿写到哪儿。至于在考场上能想起什么那得靠“缘分”，因此考生写出神形涣散的文章也就不足为奇了。还有的考生抱怨在论证段写作时写了上句没下句，原因很简单：“缘分”可遇不可求，所以“随缘”的写作很容易陷入困境。其实要解决这些问题，考生只要遵照一条规则来写就可以了，这也是议论文写作的一个基本要素：from general to specific （从概括到具体）。每个论证段需要包含论点中心句（相对概括，置于段首）和论据支持（更加具体，紧随中心句之后）。

另外，考生需要特别注意，论点中心句不仅相对概括，还应具备统领作用。打个比方，它就像网页上的超级链接，只要看到中心句，这一段的内容就了然于胸了。后面论据的作用是用更具体的细节内容来证明论点中心句成立，从而证明文章立场成立。这样一来，写作的目的性就会增强，随机性就会减少，也不会出现无话可说的问题了。

误区八：论证段盲目堆砌词句

很多考生相信，平时单词、短语、句子背得越多，考场上表现就会越从容。这有一定的道理，因为要想实现高效的论证，丰富的语言素材是必需的，但这些不是写作的全部。议论文写作其实就是说理，而说理就要有条有理。文章条理性的关键不在于堆砌语言，而在于理顺结构，理顺结构的关键又在于连接词句的运用。就托福独立写作来说，论证段内部的逻辑结构主要有两种：总分并列和阶梯推进。这两种结构的形式分别如下。

总分并列

中心句+

For one thing， …

For another， …

Another point （that is worth mentioning） is that …

Besides， …

An additional point （that should not to be overlooked） is that …

阶梯推进

中心句+

To carry the idea further， … （第一层细节）

To be exact， … （第二层细节）

误区九：例子里都是熟人

托福写作：0827托福独立写作解析与 篇3

范文：

Thanks to the constant improvement of living standards, modern people put more emphasis on health. By maintaining good health, people stand more chances to make dreams come true and enjoy a happy life. Luckily, in modern society, to keep healthy is much easier than before.

Admittedly, some people may suffer from the health problems caused by quick life pace and heavy pressure. Owing to the fierce competition in modern society, people usually complain that they have to work overtime or even burn the midnight oil and recall the easy life led by people in the past. Moreover, with much time occupied by work, they can hardly spare time to do exercises and gradually give up themselves to a sedentary lifestyle and fall into sub-health conditions. However, with the increase of awareness of those health problems, people are able to make a change by adjusting their schedule and leading a healthy life.

To begin with, the easy access to information allows people to gain more knowledge on diets than before. There are many professional websites telling people how to eat in healthy ways according to their needs. According to dietitians, it is necessary for people to have a certain proportion of meat, grain, vegetable, egg, milk, etc., so as to guarantee the absorption of nutrients needed for the body function. In addition, people also can learn from cooking shows on TV. The chef teaches audiences how to prepare healthy and delicious food. For example, my mum learnt the way to cook broccoli with a special source without losing its valuable vitamin. However, in the past, most people who were unaware of the significance of balanced diets simply believed people should eat as much as possible in case they could not find enough food the next day.

Secondly, the advancement of medical treatment also guarantees that people today can lead a healthier life than in the past. Thanks to the efforts of scientists and doctors, there are various powerful vaccines that protect people from detrimental diseases, such as chickenpox and polio. Also, as people today have more knowledge of various diseases, the early and accurate diagnosis prevents diseases from getting worse and claiming lives. More importantly, the constant improvement of medical knowledge and equipment enables doctors to cure diseases with less pain and fewer side effects and even conquer incurable diseases. For example, it took only several months to find the vaccine of Ebola spreading wildly in western Africa in , which saved thousands of lives. But, in the past, the limitation of medial knowledge inhibited people from finding right solutions. People were powerless in front of bacteria infection before the invention of Penicillin.

To sum up, it is definitely easier for modern people to lead a healthy life than they did in the past.

It is easier to maintain good health today than in the past.

现在容易保持健康：

1)更健康的食物

2)更健康的医疗

现在不容易保持健康：

1)生活压力大，亚健康

2)环境污染

3)缺乏体育锻炼

托福写作：0827托福独立写作解析与 篇4

Some parents give their kids (primary or middle school) a small amount of money weekly, others fear this may have a bad effect on kids, which do you think is better?

童老师：

家长应不应该每周给孩子零花钱?

如果站“应该给”，那么可以从以下2个角度来写：

在外更方便。

比如，孩子在学校上课期间如果感到饿了，可以用这些钱给自己买吃的不让饿着肚子。

(让步)虽然给零花钱可能会有一些不好的影响，但完全可以通过家长的正确引导来避免。

我们通常会怕孩子乱买一些没有用的东西，比如把钱花到买玩具上而非文具上，但家长可以在给零花钱的时候提前明白告知，并和孩子约定零花钱的用处，再适当监督，便可减少这些坏的影响。

独立口语思路点拨

Task 1: Your local community center wants to add some new workshops or programs for children. which of the following do you think would be most beneficial for children’s development?

- Arts craft workshop

- Technology workshop

- Athletic programs

Task 2: Which manager do you prefer, the manager that supervises subordinates at all times or the manager that would allow employees to get on with their jobs with occasional supervision?

Jojo老师：

T1我会选athletic programs，因为儿童天性喜欢玩耍，比如basketball, American football, and tennis，建立此类program也就更容易吸引到更多的儿童来参与。因此儿童可以遇到更多有着common interest的小朋友，有利于孩子们之间交到好朋友，建立友谊。

T2如果选at all times.理由可以说只有manager随时监管，才能避免员工工作出现偏差。

如果选occasionally，则可以从反面论证，阐述监管过严(at all times)的一些问题。

托福写作：1125托福独立写作 篇5

有钱有能力去帮助更多的人;

富人不应该捐款多：捐款是善举，应该被孤立，但不是被强制

1)个人合法所得，受法律保护

2)富人缴纳更多的税，已经对社会的贡献比低收入人多了

范文：

Currently, the widening gap between the rich and the poor is a social problem posing a threat to stability in many countries. As the 20% of the population accumulating 80% of the wealth globally, the rich is naturally supposed to take more social responsibility, like charity. In my mind, however, to do charity or to donate is a philanthropic act of personal choice but not anyone’s obligation. To require wealthy people to do more charity is in fact a kind of emotional blackmail.

Admittedly, affluent people have more money to donate. In contrast to the poor, they not only have more savings in bank accounts, but also enjoy higher living standards, like living in fancy houses, tasting delicious food and traveling worldwide in holidays. It seems the money they donate will not have much influence on their daily life but become a straw to clutch at for those in need. However, this argument only proves that wealthy people have the ability to help others but cannot justify that they have the obligation to do so. In fact, charity ought to be encouraged instead of being coerced.

On the one hand, all individuals’ property right is protected by the law, including that of rich people, if only the money is made through legal ways. For most people, the wealth they accumulate and social status they build is the endorsement of their capability and value. The professional knowledge and incomparable skills enable them to be competent in job market and request high incomes, the rewards of their contribution. They have full right to use and spend the money as they like. On the contrary, when donation becomes wealthy people’s duty, they actually lose the right to enjoy some rewards of their contribution, which is surely unfair. Consequently, such moral coercion to some extend discourages people’s ambition to earn more.

On the other hand, given the fact that wealthy people already have contributed more to society by paying more taxes compared to people with low income, there is no reason to morally hijack them to do more charity. The government levies different percentage of taxes on people’s incomes. The higher one’s salary is, the more taxes he pays. Take people in my city as an instance. The salary lower than 3500 yuan per month is not taxed. For the amount of salary higher than 3500 yuan, people pay 10% income tax, and for the amount of salary higher than 8000 yuan, people pay 20% income tax. Moreover, there are also other taxes imposed on the wealthy, such as property tax and heritage tax. In a word, while the rich make more money and enjoy higher living standard, they make more contribution to society, which also makes the compulsory donation from the rich unjustified.

To sum up, though wealthy people have more money to donate, it is morally incorrect to force them to donate more.

20171125托福独立写作题目：

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The more money people have, the more they should give away to charity.

托福写作：0827托福独立写作解析与 篇6

解读独立写作评分标准

语言上的错误在考试中是难免的，关键在于错误的严重程度以及错误出现的频率如何。关于语言错误会对托福独立写作的成绩产生什么影响，考生可以通过细读独立写作的评分标准来找答案。

托福成绩单后附有一个表格，这个表格对考生听、说、读、写四项的分数分别给出了具体的阐述。其中，独立写作成绩在最高档Good （对应的最终分是24～30分）的文章在语言方面的特点如下：use of English that is occasionally ungrammatical， unclear， or unidiomatic。得分在中档Fair （对应的最终分是17～23分）则意味着文章存在如下语言问题：grammatical mistakes or vague/incorrect uses of words may make the writing difficult to understand。由此可见Good档次的文章中犯语法错误必须是occasionally，即可以有错误，但必须非常少；而Fair档次的文章中语法错误可能就相对严重，会影响评卷人对文意的理解。

在《新托福考试官方指南》的评分标准中，最高档5分（对应最终分30分）在语言方面要求文章“displays consistent facility in the use of language， demonstrating syntactic variety， appropriate word choice， and idiomaticity， though it may have minor lexical or grammatical errors”。考生要想达到5分的档次，其写作中的词汇和语法错误必须在minor层面，也就是不能犯典型、重大的语法错误。4分档（对应最终分25分）在语言方面要求文章“displays facility in the use of language， demonstrating syntactic variety and range of vocabulary， though it will probably have occasional noticeable minor errors in structure， word form， or use of idiomatic language that do not interfere with meaning”。相对于5分档，4分档出现了“显著”的语言错误，但必须是“偶尔”出现这样的错误，且必须是“很小”的错误，否则就达不到4分的档次。3分档的文章“may demonstrate inconsistent facility in sentence formation and word choice that may result in lack of clarity and occasionally obscure meaning”。由此可见，3分档文章的语言错误影响到了意思的“清晰度”，有时甚至导致“意思模糊”。

评分标准的4分和5分档都提到了minor errors。那么什么是minor errors，什么是非minor errors？笔者认为，像偶尔的冠词错误、名词单复数错误、介词使用不够精准，这些错误影响相对较小，通常不会影响意思的理解，属于minor errors。不过要想取得高分，这些也只能偶尔出错，不宜频繁出错。但是，下面列出的10大错误，则是笔者根据长期教学经验总结出的考生常犯的超出了minor范畴的错误。这些错误比较严重，一旦出现就容易影响分数，尤其关系到考生得分能否进入最高档。对于这些错误，考生要特别注意避免。

考生常犯的10种语法错误

主谓不一致

中文不存在主谓一致的问题，因此很多考生在写英文句子时意识不到这一点。在英语中，主谓一致的问题在一般现在时中出现较多，特别是在第三人称单数的谓语动词上容易出现。当主语和谓语之间插入成分较多、主语离谓语较远时，这类错误更容易出现。另外在定语从句中，由于从句的谓语动词和先行词被连词隔开，考生也容易忽略从句的主谓一致问题。此外，there be句型中be动词的单复数要根据be动词后面的名词单复数而定。来看下面的几个例句。

例1：Those examination questions is very familiar to me.

评析：主语是复数名词，谓语应该用are，不应该用is。

更正：Those examination questions are every familiar to me.

例2：A school who has famous professors are more worthy for students to choose.

评析：主句的主语和谓语之间有定语从句，相隔较远，因此考生容易犯主谓不一致的错误。主句的谓语还是应当由主句的主语a school来决定。

更正：A school who has famous professors is more worthy for students to choose.

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例3：Doing housework has some advantages that is good for children’s future.

评析：That引导的定语从句的谓语应当由先行词advantages决定，先行词是复数名词，因此that引导的定语从句谓语应当用are。

更正：Doing housework has some advantages that are good for children’s future.

例4：There is so many people competing for a position.

评析：There be句型的谓语应当由be动词后面的名词决定。名词people是复数，因此be动词应该用are。

更正：There are so many people competing for a position.

句子残缺

句子必须有谓语动词才称得上完整。考生在写作中有时会出现句子没有谓语动词的情况，或是从句缺主语的情况，这都属于残缺句子。

例5：That’s why I against that people find a job just for money.

评析：Against是介词，不能作谓语，可以在前面加系动词am。

更正：That’s why I am against that people find a job just for money.

例6：I enjoy it very much when chat and play with my friends.

评析：该句中when引导的从句缺乏主语，句子残缺，需要补充主语I。

更正：I enjoy it very much when I chat and play with my friends.

一个简单句中出现两个谓语动词

很多考生在写作时只是根据中文的思维和感觉写，对于英文中一个简单句只能有一个谓语动词的规则不够敏感，容易在一个简单句中出现两个或两个以上谓语动词，这是明显违反语法的。在there be句型中特别容易出现两个谓语动词的错误。考生应当记住：一个简单句只能有一个谓语动词，当出现两个谓语动词时，要将其中一个转化成恰当的非谓语形式或从句的谓语。请看下面的例子。

例7：There are so many people compete for a position.

评析：There be句型中的be动词本身就是这个句子的谓语动词，后面不能再出现谓语动词。这时，可以将后面的动词转化为非谓语动词的形式，或者转化成从句的谓语动词。

更正1：There are so many people competing for a position.

更正2：There are so many people who compete for a position.

例8：I， nonetheless， believe that my job and my social life are both play an essential role in my daily happiness.

评析：在这个句子中，are和play是两个谓语动词，不能一起用。系动词is/am/are可以和现在分词一起用于表进行，可以和过去分词一起用于表被动，也可以和不定式一起用于表将来，但是不能和动词原形一起用。

更正1：I， nonetheless， believe that my job and my social life are both playing an essential role in my daily happiness.

更正2：I， nonetheless， believe that my job and my social life both play an essential role in my daily happiness.

从句独立成句

从句必须依附于主句而存在，单独一个连词引导的从句不能用句点和主句隔开而独立成句。

例9：It is helpful for children to make mistakes and learn from their own mistakes. Because making mistakes sometimes is the best way to avoid more mistakes and to cultivate valuable aspects of characters.

评析：Because引导的原因状语从句不能单独成句，必须依附于主句而存在。可以把两句话连成一句，或是把原因状语从句改为以it is because或this is because开头的句子。

更正1：It is helpful for children to make mistakes and learn from their own mistakes because making mistakes sometimes is the best way to avoid more mistakes and to cultivate valuable aspects of character.

更正2：It is helpful for children to make mistakes and learn from their own mistakes. This is because making mistakes sometimes is the best way to avoid more mistakes and to cultivate valuable aspects of character.

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情态动词后面没有跟动词原形

情态动词后面必须跟动词原形，不能跟动词的其他形式。

例10：We must limiting the time that children spend in watching TV.

评析：句中must是情态动词，后面必须跟动词原形，不能跟现在分词。

更正：We must limit the time that children spend in watching TV.

例11：Admittedly， the good food may contributes to an enjoyable vacation.

评析：句中may是情态动词，后面必须跟动词原形，不能跟第三人称单数形式。

更正：Admittedly， the good food may contribute to an enjoyable vacation.

两个简单句之间缺乏连词

如果用逗号连接两个简单句，那句子之间必须有恰当的连词，不能只用逗号来连接。

例12：Many Chinese students are good at their studies， they don’t have much social experience.

评析：逗号连接的是两个独立的含有主谓结构的句子，两个句子之间是转折关系，必须加上表转折的连词（如but），不能只用逗号连接。

更正：Many Chinese students are good at their studies， but they don’t have much social experience.

例13：I am a boy， I am strong.

评析：I am a boy和I am strong是两个简单句，可以在中间加连词或用分号，可以写成两句话，也可以把其中一句改为非谓语结构，但是不能只用逗号连接。

更正1：I am a boy， and I am strong.

更正2：I am a boy； I am strong.

更正3：I am a boy. I am strong.

更正4：Being a boy， I am strong.

词性误用

考生在记单词的时候容易只记单词的意思，不注意词性和用法，导致名词、动词、形容词、副词之间词性误用的情况。这样的错误比较严重，应该避免。

例14：He worked industrious all day.

评析：句中的industrious是形容词，不能修饰动词。形容词用于修饰名词，副词可以修饰动词、形容词和副词。

更正：He worked industriously all day.

代词错误

代词方面的错误主要是代词与其所指代的名词单复数不一致。

例15：As a person， sooner or later， they will meet some problems.

评析：句中的they作为复数代词与其所指代的名词person单复数不一致，此处应用单数形式的代词。

更正：As a person， sooner or later， he or she will meet some problems.

介词后面跟动词原形

介词后面不能跟动词原形，必须跟名词或动名词。

例16：People splash water on each other for celebrate their new year.

评析：介词for后面不能跟动词原形celebrate，可以改为动名词形式。

更正：People splash water on each other for celebrating their new year.

动词原形作主语

动词原形不能作主语。祈使句会用动词原形开头，但句子只是省略了主语，而不是没有主语，而且托福写作也极少用到祈使句。可以作主语的成分包括名词、代词、动名词、不定式、主语从句和形式主语it。

例17：I insist that join a sports team is the best way for us to make new friends.

评析：句中的动词原形join不能作宾语从句的主语，可以转化成动名词再作主语。

更正：I insist that joining a sports team is the best way for us to make new friends.

如何避免常犯的语法错误

上述错误是笔者在修改学生的作文时经常发现的错误类型，给出的例句也是学生在写作中出现错误的句子。除了这些错误，语法错误当然还包括时态错误、名词单复数错误、冠词错误等，但前文列出的10种语法错误对托福写作分数的影响最为显著。尽管每位考生常犯的错误不尽相同，但语法错误有这样的共同特点：它们都是长期形成的，因而具有习惯性和无意识性，可以说是非常“顽固”。考生必须刻意用心纠正才能避免在考场上犯下这些错误。

看了本文列出的10种语法错误，有些考生可能会觉得非常简单，但是不能仅仅因为看上去简单而轻视这些错误。在写作的时候，尤其是在限时的紧张情况下，这些错误很容易出现。很多考生托福写作的成绩徘徊不前，正是由于对自身存在的问题没有重视，没有刻意去纠正。为此，笔者建议考生做到以下三点。

1.平时训练的限时作文尽量找老师或同学修改，以便发现和纠正自己意识不到的错误。自己要总结出特别容易错的语法项目，制定清单，每次写作前复习，在写作的过程中刻意避免。对于不明白的语法项目，要查找语法书进行针对性学习，不必系统学习全部语法。

2.在练习的过程中，考生可以每写一段就停下来检查一下，然后再写下一段。这样可以避免犯的错误过多，来不及纠正。

3.在考试的过程中，考生可以在独立写作规定的30分钟内留出3～5分钟。在全文写完之后，用这几分钟的时间专门检查自己常犯的错误。

托福考试：1126托福独立写作 篇7

1)更好的生产方式，可以杀菌，更好的储藏方式，避免食物变坏

2)交通的发展，人们可以吃到从很远的地方运来的食物，丰富食物品种

3)现代人拥有更多的健康饮食知识，合理安排膳食以及营养物质的吸收

现在的食物不如过去健康：

1)流行垃圾食品

2)环境污染，有害物质在动植物中富集

3)大规模生产的食物含有的营养物质不如从前

范文：

In the last a few decades, people’s requirements on food have experienced a series of changes. When the problem of food scarcity has been solved, people are on the way to improve the taste, such as by innovating cooking method. But today, a new problem associated with food emerges: the decline of quality.

To begin with, as we are accustomed to the mass production of food and believe in its benefits of feeding large population, we cannot overlook the fact that some of the food we have today is actually not as nutritious as before. To meet the huge demand of food, scientists and food producers, including farmers and factories, have adopted a series of scientific methods to boost output, such as widely applying fertilizers in fields and raising large numbers of livestocks in cages. Though the benefits are undeniable, the products actually contain fewer nutrients due to the factitious changes of their natural growth. With shortened lifecycle, both crops and livestocks have not enough time to accumulate nutrients. Therefore, wealthy people today would like to pay a higher price for so-called organic food, food produced in natural ways, which actually is what all people had in the past.

Secondly, pollution is another factor influencing food quality. The rapid industrial development has generated pollution of different degrees in many areas and regions around the world. Pollution knows no boundary: the uncontrollable movement of water and wind carries pollutants worldwide. For instance, the burning of coals containing high percentage of sulphur in one place releases sulphide and cause acid rains in a much larger areas. Continuously, the contaminated rains pollute soils that they fall on and rivers that they flow into. Unavoidably, many plants and animals living in a contaminated environment contain more or less elements harmful to people’s health. Currently, one of the most seriously affected sources of food is seafood, mainly due to the discharge of sewage along the coast. As a result, many kinds of heavy metals deposited in fish, shrimps, crabs and oysters are taken by people. All these are hidden threats to people’s health. The alarming problem of food contamination makes people recall the old time when there was no pollution.

To sum up, although the constantly improving of living standards may convince us that we have better food today than in the past, there are in fact new concerns on food quality: less nutrition but more pollution.

20171126托福独立写作题目：

Many people believe that food in the past were better for people’s health than food today.

Or

The food we eat today is much healthier than that we ate in the past.

托福独立写作写作思路讲解 篇8

托福独立作文最重要的因素是什么?当然是论点和论证。一篇好的作文，论点可以提纲挈领，论证可以丰富文章内容。

由于考试时间的限制，很多英语程度好的学生也会出现一些问题。比如说一个学生对作文的论点言之凿凿，但就是写不出东西，或是写不出令自己满意的句子。所以，上考场前，脑中一定要装一些东西，好的例子，好的句子等。

这里强调论据的重要性，不是忽视逻辑和论点的重要性。相反，只要你能够掌握一些万能的论据，对你谋划全篇的结构，以及段落发展，是有好处的。

论据的准备也可以称为素材，可以多去亦鸥看看小伙伴们的写作，这种素材可以是一个短语，一个人名，或是一个完整的例子。这种例子能够辅佐你的乱点，能够画龙点睛。

托福独立写作 篇9

Some people like A; others like B. Which one do you prefer—A or B? (1) No doubt, I choose A, because there are too many benefits that outnumber its disadvantages. But B on the other hand, has advantages no more than its disadvantages.

The most important benefit of A is that___________________.

To achieve the same effect, B will__________________.

Another benefit of A, which B almost cannot achieve, is that___________________.

Although B also has its seemingly profound advantages, it can only be achieved conditionally because_________________________.

After understanding the reasoning above, it is quite safe now to say: to choose A is a wise action.

(2)

Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, contradict A. Personally, I would prefer__________ because I think A has more advantages.

There are numerous reasons why________, and I would here explain a few of the most important ones. The main reason is that___________. It can be given a concrete example_____________.

Another reason why I advocate the attitude of A is that___________. Take the case of a thing that_______________. One very strong argument for A is that__________________. This demonstrates the undeniable fact that_____________________.

Of course, choosing B also has advantages to some extent, __________.