英语专业四级作文评分标准

英语专业四级作文评分标准（通用9篇）

英语专业四级作文评分标准 篇1

优秀（90以上）良好（80-89）中等（70-79）及格（60-69）不及格（60以下）

内容陈述（35分）内容完整，层次分明，重点突出；陈述从容熟练，语言通畅，用词恰当，表达准确。内容完整，层次分明，重点突出；陈述欠熟练，语言较顺畅，表达较准确。内容完整，层次比较分明；陈述欠熟练，语言不够流畅，表达基本准确。内容基本完整，层次基本清楚，重点不够突出；陈述不够熟练。内容不完整，层次不清楚，没有重点；语言组织零乱，表达不确切。

问题回答（45分）能够完整、准确回答全部提问内容；观点正确，层次清楚，论据充分；语言表达顺畅，逻辑性强；引证资料翔实，理论联系实际；有创见和新意。能完整、准确的回答全部提问；观点正确，层次比较分明，论据比较充分；语言表达比较顺畅，逻辑性较强；较有创见和新意。一般能准确的回答部分提问；观点正确，层次比较分明；语言表达比较顺畅，逻辑性不够强。能基本回答三分之二以上的提问：观点基本正确，层次不够清楚，论据不够充分；语言表达能力较差。不能回答三分之二的提问，对基本概念、理论表达不清；语言表达能力差，逻辑混乱；答辩委员会判断此论文为抄袭之作。

ppT应用（10分）内容结构合理、有章有序，清晰地呈现陈述思路。充分体现了ppT的辅助功效。内容结构合理、较清晰地呈现陈述思路，能较充分地体现ppT的辅助功效。内容结构较合理、较清晰地呈现陈述思路。内容结构基本合理、基本清晰地呈现陈述思路。内容结构不合理、不能清晰地呈现陈述思路。

仪表举止

（10分）仪表要整洁大方，举止端庄；积极主动，礼貌待人，表情自然，态度诚恳，用语文明。仪表整洁大方，举止端庄；较积极主动，礼貌待人；表情较自然，态度较诚恳，用语较文明。仪表基本整洁大方，举止较端庄；

表情基本自然，态度基本诚恳。礼貌待人，但不够积极主动；较慌张。仪表不整洁大方，态度不端正。

注：论文答辩时采用百分制，最后综合成绩评定转换为五级记分制）

外语学院

河南中考英语作文评分标准 篇2

据标准答案和评分标准规定，英语书面表达的满分为15分，分4档评分：

第一档(13~15分)，符合题目要求，内容完整，层次结构清晰，表达清楚，语言无误。

第二档(9~12分)，基本题目要求，内容较完整，层次结构较清晰，表达较清楚，语言有少量错误。

第三档(4~8分)，部分内容符合题目要求，内容不够完整，层次结构不够清晰，表达不够清楚，语言有较多错误。

第四档(0~3分)，不符合题目要求，整片表达不清楚，或照抄、拼凑几个词语。

高考英语作文评分标准细则 篇3

1.打好扎实的英语语言基础

要写好英语作文，首先必须掌握一定数量的英语单词。此外还得掌握好一定的英语语法知识。若有不太清楚的地方，应通过查阅语法书和词典来逐步解决，不能偷懒，随便乱写。

2.广泛进行英语阅读

专业作家的秘密之一就是：阅读，阅读，再阅读。阅读其他人的文章，并不是为了如法炮制，但我们可以把从其他作品中学到的东西融化到自己的文体和技巧中 去。当我们发现一段文章比自己能写出的任何东西好得多的时候，坐下来，对它进行反复研究琢磨。就同一题目，这位作者做了哪些我们不能做到的事情?模仿别人 技术上的长处，对写作来说极有益处。但仅靠阅读是不行的，因为它可以被用作不动笔的借口，还会成为一种医学专用剂。因此要记住：阅读是为了写作。

3.掌握一定的英语写作技巧

英语写作有许多技巧，如怎样选词，造句，怎样展开段落，各种体裁的英语作文应怎样布局谋篇等。只有对这些基本的写作技巧加以掌握，才能在英语写作时得心应手。

4.多观察多分析

写的时候首先考虑内容问题，问问自己写什么，并用英语来思考，那么在英语写作时，便不至于找不到话写。

5.多练习

北京中考英语作文评分标准 篇4

一等(很好)：(17——20分)

1、完全完成了试题规定的任务。

2、覆盖所有内容要点。

3、应用了较多的语法结构。

4、语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致，具备较强的语言运用能力。

5、有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，是全文结构紧凑。

6、完全达到了预期的写作目的。

二等(好)：(13——16分)

1、完成了试题规定的任务。

2、虽漏掉了1或2个次要点，但覆盖所有的主要内容。

3、应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。

4、语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂的语法结构或词汇所致。

5、应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文架构紧凑。

6、达到了预期的写作目的。

三等(适当)：(9——12分)

1、基本完成了试题规定的任务。

2、虽漏掉了一些内容，但覆盖了所有的主要内容。

3、应用的语法结构和词汇能够满足任务的要求。

4、有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。

5、应用简单的语句间的连接成分，是全文内容连贯。

6、整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。

四等(较差)：(5——8分)

1、未恰当完成试题规定的任务。

2、漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。

3、语法结构单调，词汇项目有限。

4、有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。

5、较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。

6、信息未能清晰地传达给读者。

五等(差)：(1——4分)

1、未完成试题规定的任务。

2、明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求。

3、语法结构单调，词汇项目有限。

4、较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。

5、缺乏语句间的连贯成份，内容不连贯。

6、信息未能传达给读者。

等外(0分)

抄袭试题内容或语段，写的内容均与多要求内容无关或所写内容无法清楚、看懂。

中考英语书面表达试题属综合运用型试题，是考查学生运用各项语法知识、正确进行书面表达的能力以及善于理解情景提示的内容，那考生怎样来提高这部分试题的分数呢?只要培养好写作兴趣,并进行点滴的积累,掌握一定的方法技巧，达到理想效果是非常快捷的。 打牢基础，养成勤练习的好习惯

要想在有限的篇幅和时间内，使书面表达行文流畅，语言丰富、得体，就要按题目的需要和自己实际英文水平，扬长避短，选用最熟悉的最有把握的词、句，注意时态、语态等多种句式的交替使用。

“最主要的是一定要平时打牢基础，练好基本功，养成练习的好习惯;多研究中考书面表达的要求，重视技巧训练;适时进行备考训练。”

这些能力包括：在所学词汇、语法和句型的基础上写出句意完整、语法准确的句子;能根据所提供的材料信息、图片、图表及英文词汇完成应用文、话题作文和看图作文;切中题意，文理通顺;上下文连贯，逻辑正确;要素完整，语言得当;格式正确;无拼写错误及大小写错误，书写规范整洁，标点正确。

初中英语作文评分标准写作技巧 篇5

(一)消除恐惧心理

自英语普及后，根据社会要求，杜绝“哑巴英语”，大多数的学校都从一年级就开设英语课程，到了四年级，学生的口头表达能力都很好，笔头方面就相对弱了。进行英语写作，他们就会觉得不自信，觉得自己水平达不到，能力也够不上。针对这点，就得需要教师在教学中，根据学生的实际能力安排教学。学生是教学的主体，要想教学有效果，就必须发挥学生的主动性。学生怕写作，一方面是觉得自己的所积累的词汇量和句子不够多，教师在教学中注重适量的拓展和培养积累单词，词组的好习惯，对句子进行举一反三的说。另一方面学生怕在写作中犯错，怕会因为一些小错误就受到老师的批评，就这方面，教师在指导时应多给予鼓励，只有让他们认识到了错误，改正了，才会减少错误，在鼓励中增强学生的自信心，从而消除他们对写作的恐惧感。

(二)创设写作环境

大学英语六级考试作文评分标准 篇6

【大纲要求：】

《大学英语六级考试大纲》规定，作文部分共一题，考试时间为30分钟，考生应按要求完成一篇不少于150词的作文。要求内容切题、能正确的表达思想、语义连贯、文理基本通顺、无重大语法错误。写作形式多样，如看图作文、根据所给文章（英语或汉语）写摘要或大意、根据所给题目作文、根据所给关键词作文、根据所给主题句作文、根据所列提纲作文以及书信等应用文。

【评分原则：】

（1）CET-6是考查学生英语水平是否达到大学英语教学大纲规定的六级教学要求，对作文的评判应以此要求为准则。

（2）CET-6作文题采取整体评分的方法。阅卷人就作文的总体印象给出奖励分，而不是按照语言的错误扣分。

（3）从语言和内容链各个方面对作文进行综合评判。内容和语言是一个统一体。作文应表达题目所规定的内容，而内容则通过语言来表达。在评判时，要考虑到作文是否切题，是否充分表达思想，也要考虑到考生是否能够用英语清楚地表达自己的思想，即考生的语言表达是否正确，符合逻辑。

(4)避免趋中倾向。在评判作文的过程中，该给高分的给高分，包括满分；该给低分的给低分，包括零分。阅卷人员在所阅的作文卷中不应该只给中间的分数。

【评分标准：】

写作占六级试题总分的15%，阅卷标准分5个等级：19分、47分、76分、104分、132分。

各分段具体评分标准如下：

19分—条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子存在错误，且严重错误居多。

47分—基本切题。表达意思不清晰，连贯性差，有较多的严重错误。

76分—基本切题。有些地方表达不够清楚，文字勉强连贯，语言错误较多，其中又少量的严重错误。

104分—切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量的语法错误。

英语专业四级作文评分标准 篇7

考研英语一作文怎么复习，我们可以从历年考研英语作文评分标准来制定复习策略，针对得分点，来拿下作文。在说明考研英语一作文怎么复习之前，我们先了解一下英一的作文评分标准。

通过作文评分标准，我们可以看出，作文想要得高分不外乎这3点：词汇丰富、语言准确、少词汇语法错误，那么怎么才能做到这3点取得高分呢？ 下面请看具体的操作步骤： 第一阶段：打好作文基础

刚开始复习作文的时候就需要积累大量的词汇和句子，为作文写作打好基础，让作文有话说。并且按照作文类型整理归类这些词汇和句子，为作文写作提供充足的替换词组和句子。就比如可以按这样分类： 1.图表类作文词汇： tremendous 极大的 accumulated 累积的 witness 见证

tangible 切实的，有形的 pie chart 饼状图 histogram 柱状图 line graph 折线图 fluctuate 波动 proportion比例；比重 tendency n趋势 relatively 相当地；相对地 2.图表作文的常用句式表达：

① According to the graph, it can be seen that..据图表可看出....② It is apparent from the figures/ statistics… 从这些数据可知，……显而易见。

③ The bar chart illustrates that..该条形图展示了........④ This is a column chart showing… 这个柱状图描述了...........⑤ Indicators in the chart/ table reflect that......表中的数据反映了…

按照作文类型去整理归类词汇和句子，在写到同类作文的时候就可以直接拿来用了，对于其他类型的作文词组和句子大家可以参考《写作160篇》，对于写作常用词汇和句子都有讲解，帮你打好写作基础的同时，通过三步作文法帮你拔高作文，专门针对基础薄弱的，跟着好好学就行了。第二阶段：分类练习

这个时候就需要按专题分类练习，比如应用文按建议信，感谢信，邀请信等分类，英语一图画按消极中性积极分类等，根据分类来练习作文写作，练习完一类并进行总结，学习范文的写作思路，和格式框架。把激烈的好词好句就可以用到作文中，为作文增添亮点。第三阶段：修改作文

这是最重要的阶段，没有批改就没有进步，因为你永远都不知道自己的短板及写作思维误区在哪里。

写作一定要有人帮你批改评估，作文批改也远远不是只是修改错误单词和语法那么简单，在自己作品批改后和自己之前的文章对比之下，发现自己的不足，在作文练习中有意识的去纠正，这样你的作文水平才会稳步提高。

通过词汇和句子的积累、写作练习、修改作文，你的作文水平就在一步步中得到提升，坚持下去，作文写作肯定差不了。当然，如果你还想拔高作文分数，冲击名校，那么张国静的尖刀侠《考研英语高分作文36法则》就非常适合你，用从真题中提炼出的写作方法,教你学会句式突破，不会与他人雷同！还有同步作文网课也在进行中。

英语专业四级作文竞争与合作 篇8

There has been a heated debate on the relationship between competition and cooperation in the modern society where severe competition and harmonious cooperation surround us.Numerous people argue that competition is the mainstream in this society, and everyone should be competitive.Nevertheless, a considerable number of individuals claim that the advantages of cooperation incredibly outweigh the benefits acquired from competition, and therefore, cooperation is the major point supposed to bear in mind.As far as I am concerned, both competition and cooperation are essential and significant in our daily life and social progress.The reason why I hold that both competition and cooperation exert positive influence can be justified in the following illustration.On one hand, competition engenders the impetus triggering every improvement in human society.Driven by the impulse of pursuing the excellence, each individual is forced by the pressure of competition, attempting to be the best.Without competition, they would be content with their current possession.In this case, their present condition, even the present human society, will stay still and no improvement will be achieved.In spite of the strong desire to success and be the best, the significance of cooperation arises from the impossibility to complete everything alone in the current society.It is inconceivable for an individual to live without the assistance from others.Every single person needs to cooperate with others to survive in the modern days, to conquer stumbling blocks, to complete integrated tasks, or to achieve higher expectations, all of which are not able to be conducted by mere competition.All the illustrations above can warrant the point that both competition and cooperation are indispensable.Although there is no perfect and universal recipe to the relationship in modern society, the public commitment of the necessity of the balance between competition and cooperation may be the first step towards the right direction.Consequently, it is high time that it must be recognized that competition enhances individuals capability while cooperation combines all ability to overpower any obstacles.

英语专业四级作文评分标准 篇9

构思点拨：低碳生活，本文旨在倡导一种低碳环保的生活方式。因此本文内容和结构可如下：第一段：描述图画；第二段：列举现象，分析影响；第三段：建议措施，展望未来。思维拓展：环保话题，例如节约能源、拼车、交通问题等图片都可以与低碳生活的理念相联系，从低碳的角度入手展开写作。

As is vividly depicted by the drawing above, a boy is sleeping soundly① and comfortably in the sofa, with the television on, when his mother comes and turns off the television for him, blaming the boy for not having turned off the television again②。

This phenomenon can easily be found anywhere in our daily life.Many people are used to doing③ everything with the television on, not actually watching it at all.Such a habit can cause waste of much electricity and energy, and result in the emission of carbon.This deviates from the popular concept of “low carbon life” — to reduce the emission of carbon, especially carbon dioxide, to protect our environment and realize sustainable development.According to statistics, if we can decrease the time for having the television on by one hour each day, we can deduce the amount of carbon emission by 4.71 kilogram each month。

To serve as responsible stewards of the planet④, we must promote and popularize a low carbon life among the public from every detail in our daily life.We must change the past practice of sacrificing long-term environmental health for short-term rapid economic development, and shift to developing green economy, circular economy and low carbon economy.All these effective measures can help us to reach harmony between development of the society and health of the nature。

名师点评；① is sleeping soundly: 熟睡，也可以表达为 A boy is fast asleep。“② A boy is sleeping soundly and comfortably in the sofa, with the television on, when his mother comes and turns off the television for him, blaming the boy for not having turned off the television again。“with the television on”，with 引导的伴随结构，即A boy is sleeping, while the television is on.也可以写成伴随状语A boy is sleeping, forgetting to turn off the television。③ are used to doing:习惯于做

某事，使用短语表达，地道准确。

二、网络的利与弊 思路点拨：一个现实：网络文化有利也有弊。因此本文可以这样设计：第一段：描述图画；第二段：网络的利+举例，网络的弊+举例；第三段：提出建议措施——取其精华，去其糟粕。思路拓展：所有利弊型的文章，均可按照本范文提供的思路进行论述。例如，城市化的利与弊。大学扩招的利与弊等。

高分范文

Just as what is shown in the picture, a girl is asking a question online.Answers from different netizens differ so greatly that the girl is very confused about whom she should follow①.It is obvious that it is becoming a fashion for people to ask questions online when confronting a dilemma。

The implication implicit in the drawing can be elaborated as follows.On the one hand, the Internet has provided us with great convenience.For example, we can get knowledge about nearly all aspects on the Internet with only several keyboard commands and a few clicks of the mouse through search engines such as Baidu and so on.On the other hand, with an explosive amount of information on the Internet②, it can be difficult to tell good information from bad③.For example, teenagers and adolescents may mistake the bad information online as good, the result of which can be rather devastating.Some dirty information on the net may exert negative impacts on people。

In conclusion, on the one hand, it is important for us to take full advantage of Internet to enhance our efficiency and save our time.On the other hand, effective steps should be taken to educate people to avoid and elude inappropriate and even wrong data online so as not to be misguided.Only in this way can the net better serve for our life, study and work④。

三、醉酒驾车与安全意识、社会责任

思路点拨：

图画有点夸张，但是它却反映了一个触目惊心的安全问题：醉酒驾车。写作时可以按照以下的脉络展开论述：第一段：描述图画；第二段：分两个分论点进行论述：提高安全意识、提高社会责任感；第三段：建议措施、强调后果。思维拓展：实际上，本文的内容和行文思路，不仅仅适用于醉酒驾车，还适用于所有关于安全事故和社会责任的图片话题。例如，火灾、漏油事故、施工事故、违反交规等等一系列与安全或社会责任感相关的话题，都可以参考此文。

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What a scary and sensational scene it is!In the drawing, the driver, as drunken as a fiddler①, is driving fast on the road, with a large bottle of beer on the top of his car.What is conveyed by the picture has both realistic and alarming implications for each member of the country。

The profound meaning of the vivid drawing can be elaborated in terms of both awareness of security and social responsibility.For one thing, consciousness of safety should be one of our top priorities.Life is one-way journey: you cannot experience it twice.So life is to be respected and awed②.It is cruel to and inhumane to spell the end of any life, with a careless driving under the influence(DUI)③.For another, to act as a responsible member of the society, each of us should bear social responsibility.We do not live only for ourselves but also for those whom we love and who love us.It is irresponsible to claim either lives of drivers or lives of other victims are not important, leaving the families and relatives into deep grief and, may be, great living burden④。

In short, it is imperative that legislative measures should be taken by the authority to punish drunk drivers severely such as suspending their driving licenses or even putting them into jail.Besides, the mass media, such as TV, radio and website, should work together to enhance awareness of security and sense of responsibility to reduce the rate of car accident。

名师点评：① as drunken as a fiddler: 醉得像一个游荡者。实际上是一个比喻，相当于汉语中的烂醉如泥。② Life is one-way journey: you cannot experience it twice：非常富有哲理性，语言优美、地道。respected and awed: 敬重和敬畏，语言简洁、有力、到位。③ DUI: 醉酒驾车，也可以写成：drunk driving。④ leaving„:动词的ing形式作伴随状语。句型经典。

四、大学生就业：放低姿态、平常心做人

思路点拨： 一位正在找工作的年轻女孩，毫不犹豫地拒绝了一份服务岗位的工作，不屑一顾地说：“伺候人的工作我不干”。很多年轻人找工作时，眼光过高，不切实际，没有用平常心对待就业问题。实际上，可以先就业后择业。所以这篇图画作文可以这样创作：第一段：描述图画；第二段：两个角度分析这种现象的原因：志存高远，不愿意从底层做起；好逸恶劳；第三段：建议措施：教育年轻人要脚踏实地；根除好逸恶劳的思想。思维拓展：关于平常心态做人、脚踏实地的话题还可以有很多，例如城市选择问题、院校报考问题、专业选择问题、股市问题，均可以从这个角度出发，进行展开论述。

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As is vividly depicted by the drawing above, the job-hunting girl refuses a service post without any hesitation, complaining that she will never take a job of serving others①.At the same time she is wondering why finding a promising job is so difficult in modern society②。

This phenomenon can easily be found anywhere in our daily life③, especially on campus.On the one hand, many job-seekers are reluctant to take jobs that they consider to be humble and trivial, such as being a secretary or an assistant, because they have great ambitions and they only want to ride on the peak of success.What is amazing is that they are not conscious that ambition is to be achieved step by step④.On the other hand, wanting to gain more but pay less, both the jobless and graduating students aspire to seek a job that is well-paid, relaxed and comfortable.This kind of “no work, all play” attitude toward life can be destructive to both personal and social development.We should not look down upon service industry, the third industry, because it does provide us with many employment opportunities and positions⑤。

Therefore, it is high time that we took effective measures to improve the current situation.For one thing, an education campaign should be launched to popularize the idea that “the longest journey starts with a single step” and to cultivate a down-to-earth attitude toward life.For another, the tendency of being lazy must be eradicated from the mind of the young.Only in this way can people realize their value of life better and can unemployment rate be reduced and thus can social harmony be achieved⑥。

④ be conscious that: 意识到，that后边必须接完整的主谓宾结构。这个表达等同于be aware that，可以进行同意替换。此外：be conscious of 和be aware of 在意思上也等同于这两者，表示意识到。但是：be conscious of 和be aware of后边要接单词或者短语，一般不能加句子。⑤ the third industry: 第三产业，是service industry(服务业)的同位语。巧妙地使用同位语，可以把单调的句子变得错落有致、抑扬顿挫。it does provide us with: does在句中表强调，翻译成“确实”。⑥ Only in this way can„ realize„ and can„ be„ and thus can„ be„：排比句，短促有力，气势强大，使得对未来的展望显得信心十足！这个句型：Only in this way can we live in a harmonious society，五、节约资源 思路点拨：本图描述的场景是一副令人喜闻乐见的图画，图画中，一只可爱的小猪造型的储蓄罐，正在接住自来水里滴下来的水滴，像存钱一样，存储水滴。实际上，它储存的不是水，它储存的是幸福。我们可以看出，人们有了节水意识。但是，从正在滴水的水龙头看，还是有人忽略了节约用水这一问题。因此，本文可以这样写作：第一段：描述图画；第二段分析有些人浪费水的心理，并阐述水资源的宝贵；第三段：建议措施。思维拓展：实际上，积极正面的图片写作，和揭示负面现象的文章没有什么本质上的区别，只要我们笔锋一转，就能把它继续按照原来的套路写。本文也可以从低碳、环保的角度出发进行写作。高分范文

Water used to be mistaken to be an unlimited and renewable resource.Actually, water resource is very limited and precious.It is fortunate that now the public is starting to pay attention①.Just as is depicted in the picture, just like saving money, the lovely and smiling piggy bank is collecting every drop of water falling from the water tap。

However, water shortage is still a serious problem threatening the existence and survival of the whole human being, and yet the phenomenon of wasting water can still easily be found anywhere in our daily life②.For example, water taps are frequently left on by careless users.Someone even assumes that they have the right to waste water because they pay for it so that it has nothing to do with others.In fact, so precious is water that we cannot afford to waste it③.Water resource is indispensable④ not only in our daily life but also in the industry and agriculture.And water is the wealth of the whole mankind, and it is hard to imagine what the world would be like⑤ when there is no more water。

Even though an increasing number of people have become aware of⑥ this emergency, further measures still need to be taken.On the macro level, the whole world should make a joint effort to fight against waste of water.On the micro level, publicizing activities, such as broadcasting wonderful ways on how to save water on TV and other media, should be conducted.To store water means to store happiness and only by saving water can we save a better life for our offspring。

六、面对人生与社会：乐观与豁达

思路点拨：它乐观、豁达地认为，有阴影，那么就说明有阳光。向我们传达了一种健康的人生哲学：乐观生活、达观处世。这是一篇人生哲理类文章，所以文章安排可以相对自由一些：第一段：描述图画；第二段：利用正反举例论证悲观与乐观的差距+总结句；第三段：倡导一种乐观生活、达观处世的人生态度和人生哲学。本文也可以从世界观、人生观的角度入手。相反，如果是一幅表明悲观厌世的图片，我们也可以采取同样的手法进行处理。

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As is apparently revealed in the cartoon above, the sheep lives happily in an optimistic state of mind, ignoring the threat of a dark shade, because he believes that where there is shadow, there is sunshine①.What is conveyed in the picture is both positive and illuminating。

As far as the purpose of the drawer is concerned, I think he intends to remind us of the importance of optimism.If the sheep in the cartoon feels anxious and pessimistic about the dark shade all day long, he can by no means have a comfortable and happy life.Examples like this are numerous, but I think the following one will be convincing enough.If there is half a cup of water, the pessimist may cry over it because they have only a half, while② the optimist may cheer for it because they still have a half.Obviously, they will have different perceptions and feelings

③ toward the same life。

There is no denying that, most optimists have a high happiness index, which can hardly be experienced by pessimists.Therefore, we must read our life with a positive attitude.What’s more, the optimistic attitude can infect others strongly, meaning that we will find that all the friends around us are optimistic if we observe them in the same perspective.As a result, an atmosphere of optimism and happiness could be naturally set up.Therefore, let’s keep the famous line of Shelley, the well-known poet, in mind for ever, that is, “If winter comes, can spring be far behind?”

④

名师点评：① where there is shadow, there is sunshine: 这句话正是仿写了我们非常熟悉的谚语“Where there is a will, there is a way”：有

志者，事竟成。

③ perceptions and feelings:近义词叠加。这两个词合译为：感受。

④ Therefore, let’s keep the famous line of shelley, the well-known poet, in mind for ever, that is, “If winter comes, can spring be far

behind?”

全文的点睛之笔，堪称经典。首先：keep sth.in mind 这个词组用得很地

道。

其次：引用了雪莱的诗歌，表现出了深厚的文化底蕴。第三：the famous line=“If winter comes, can spring be far behind?”即后者为前者的同位语。

同位语的介入，使句子结构错落有致，层次分明，朗朗上口。第四：著名诗句“If winter comes, can spring be far behind?”淋漓尽致地诠释了乐观的生活态度。

七、商业行贿

构思点拨：商业贿赂。深层次来讲，就是道德问题、责任问题。本文的内容和结构安排如下：第一段：描述图画；第二段：从两个角度分析影响+分析动机；第三段：建议措施。思维拓展此类文章可以展开的角度有：金钱观，商业道德建设、职业道德建设，公平竞争。相似的图片比比皆是。

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There is no doubt that this cartoon vividly depicts a negative but rampant scenario in modern society: commercial bribery.Frightened by the sharp punishment sword, the man, carrying a large pile of money used as bribery①, is trying his best to escape.What is conveyed by the drawing is both realistic and thought-provoking。

The implication of the given picture can be elaborated in terms of the decline of work-moral values and the view on money.For one thing, commercial bribery has a very damaging and destructive② effect on the whole society.Firstly, moral deficiencies as well as the humanity weakness revealed in the action of bribery③ may stain and pollute the atmosphere of professional ethics and cause others to copy.Secondly, fair competition may be threatened because bribery puts honest businessmen at a disadvantaged position.For another, the bad behavior of commercial bribery is largely driven by “profit”，showing that those people who are involved in bribery do not have a right view on money.It is true that money is indispensable④, but, there is no denying that money should be obtained and spent in a reasonable, wise and legitimate way。

To eliminate the immoral behavior of bribery thoroughly⑤, drastic actions should be taken and severe punishment measures should be adopted.Besides, a positive mental guidance on the right attitude to money should be popularized among the public.Only in this way can we have a fair and

sound social environment。

八、城市交通

思路点拨：城市交通的压力问题。同时，汽车过多就意味着尾气排放过多，所以这幅图同时又反映了环保和低碳问题。第一段：描述图画；第二段：分析交通堵塞给人和环境带来的影响；第三段：建议措施。思维拓展建议措施部分，还可以从如下角度提出：呼吁政府：投资完善基础设施、继续坚持限行的制度。倡导低碳出行：步行、骑自行车。倡导理智选择城市：人全部拥挤在大城市带来的负面

影响。

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How horrible the traffic is!The picture depicts a scenario of a terrible traffic jam in the street.In fact, the traffic jam is so heavy that it is more of a parking lot than a crowded street①.Anxious passengers cannot take buses because there are few buses.Instead, the street is filled with too many private cars。

Exaggerated as it is, the phenomenon is not uncommon nowadays.With the number of private cars increasing②, traffic jams in metropolitans are bound to happen.Heavy transportation pressure in large cities may bring much inconvenience to people and exert negative impacts on the environment.On the one hand, when traffic jam happens, short distance in the past now seems to become terribly long, and drivers could do nothing but to wait.Therefore, a lot of precious time has been wasted on the road.On the other hand, exhausted gas emitted by cars③ has increased the burden of environment and caused carbon emission, which has diverted from the concept of living a low carbon life。

Therefore, effective measures should be taken to alleviate the traffic jam.Firstly, taxes levied on the sales of private cars④ should be raised so as to restrict private car ownership rate.Secondly, public transportation such as buses and subways, which are low-carbon transportation means, should be encouraged and promoted so that we can

have a smooth transportation。

名师点评： it is more of a parking lot than a crowded street: more of A than B的结构，通过字面可以理解成：更多的是A而不是B。翻译的时候，往往翻译成：与其说是B，不如说是A。反过来，表达“与其„„不如„„”

九、科技与生活

思路点拨：表面上看，它反映的是城市与城市之间距离被“缩短”的问题，但是更深层次来讲，是科技带来了这一切，所以这幅图可以有两个切入点：城际交通、科技改变生活。本文作者选取了第二个角度为主要论述视角。第一段：图画描述；第二段：两个角度论述科学技术是第一生产力；第三段：提出建议、展望未来。思维拓展 科技的话题，实际上是映射热点问题：上海世博。世博的主题“城市让生活更美好”，其中一个侧面就是城市与科技。可以反映“科技”主题的图片有很多，如现代通讯、网络等。

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As is vividly depicted by the picture above, a traveler happily starts his journey by high-speed railway from Guangzhou to Wuhan.In the year of 2009, Wuhan-Guangzhou high-speed railway went into operation, reducing travelling time from 12 hours to 3 hours, bringing much convenience to the transportation between the two cities①.No wonder the caption in the picture says “with the Wu-Guang high-speed railway, cities far away is just like a place nearby”。

Science and technology are the primary productive forces② and have been playing a key role in the national economy development.On the one hand, progress in science and technology has promoted economic and social progress greatly.Take the high-speed railway as an example.Firstly, the railway becomes a new engine③ of booming of regional economic.Secondly, the railway helps to attract a lot of tourists, so that tourism in these cities flourishes.Last but not the least, the load of the existing transportation network can be released to a great extent.On the other hand, with the development of science and technology, such as the operation of high-speed transportation, video phone, webcam meeting, the world has become smaller and smaller。

It has long been a tradition for Chinese government to attach great importance to the advances④ in science and technology.Science and technology has successfully shaped an entirely new image of China on global stage via the two grand world events, 2008 Olympic Games and 2010 Shanghai World Expo.It is strongly advised that young people should devote themselves into the study of science and technology for “better city, better life”。

名师点评：② Science and technology are the primary productive forces: 科学技术是第一生产力。③ a new engine: 一个新的引擎，这是一个形象的比喻，把科技对经济发展的动力表达得非常具体、形象。本文中 “发展”，多次出现，作者采用了多样化的词汇： “development(n。)”，“progress(n。)”，“flourish(v。)”，“boom(v./n.)”，“advance”。这类词汇还有：

“prosperous(adj。)”，“improve(v。)”等。

十、弘扬民族文化 思路点拨： 图片中共有三个内容：陶瓷花瓶、功夫熊猫、麻将牌。这三种形象都是典型的中国元素。正如图片的名称“欧洲的‘中国热’”所说，一种学习中国传统文化和汉语语言的热潮正在欧洲悄然兴起。毫无疑问，本图的主题是：弘扬中国文化，以及中国国际形象、国际地位的上升。全文行思路可如下：第一段：分别描述图画中体现出的中国元素；第二段：分析外国人对中华文化的兴趣提升的原因+举例；第三段：对待民族文化的正确态度。思维拓展：保护文物、文明遗产、名胜古迹的图片也可以从捍卫和弘扬民族文化的角度入手加以分析论证。

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In the picture, we can see that there are some vases made of china, which are typical products in China since ancient time.An image of a panda playing Kung Fu① is carved on the surface of the vases, in which both Panda and Kung Fu are the symbols of Chinese elements.Besides, the Chinese mahjong which is growing out of a vase is also a typical Chinese element。

It is obvious that the main purpose of the picture is to reflect the phenomenon of “China fever”，referring to a foreign passion and enthusiasm② on Chinese elements, especially culture.There are reasons accounting for the growing interest in Chinese elements.For one thing, for the past decades, China has made conspicuous progress in all fields such as economy, science and technology, and comprehensive strength of China has been enhanced greatly.For another, due to the progress, China presents a new image to the world and is becoming increasingly attractive and appealing③ to the whole world.Nearly every day news stories are reported and broadcasted④ about what is going on in and around China.And By 2010, there are 72 Confucius Institutes in 26 European countries established to spread Chinese language and culture⑤。

Toward this kind of “China craze”，we should hold a right attitude.On the one hand, we should take pride in the “China craze” by foreigners, which originates from the increasing prestige of China.On the other hand, it is the responsibility of each Chinese citizen to popularize and promote excellent traditional Chinese culture and guard a favorable image of our